special place HB

Purpose: to inform

WALT describe with clear and interesting details

Success Criteria

• Quick plan to prepare for the writing task (brainstorm with words or ideas)
• Interesting beginning and ending
• Using the senses (see, touch, hear, smell)
• Includes strong descriptive words (adjectives)

Uses the present tense

Examples: Bamboo Forest / Scene Description by Dylan / Scene Description by Sophia

Writing Task: Describing a special place in Hawke’s Bay

national aquarium of New Zealand

A magical place full of fish and life as I walk around I feel the life. I gaze at the fish swimming around me I wish I could swim with them the seaweed waving all around me suddenly a stingray jumps out of the darkness and into the light I gaze at it wondering as  I move on when I entered the . I could see all the fish and sharks the stingrays that swim around in such a magical place.It is  like stepping into a new world of mysteries and life. Outside no life shines from it but inside It's a different world full of fish as I watched a penguin eat a fish that a man feed the penguin when I saw the sea horse’s and lobsters and the giant octopus I thought how much I loved the aquarium I saw a shark smiling  showing all its sharp teeth the fishes in the fish tanks I loved it but when we came to the  end at the gift shop I wanted it to start all over again.I also love the Auckland aquarium it's really good when I look out the window I can see the sea and all the fish. I never want to leave the aquarium!   By Sadie